User talk:Jxw773/Benchmark III: Results

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Student Comments

  • a couple typos make the first section hard to read, also consider putting the differential equation in its own line
  • in general, throughout this needs some more careful formatting because as of now some things are very hard to read (not your writing, just awkward having large equations mixed with small text)
  • some of the captions could be explained in more detail so that the reader truly understands what you are describing
  • overall, good content, just work a bit on formatting and expanding some explanations

--Micaela Richter (talk) 00:04, 25 April 2017 (EDT)


  • I would recommend putting all equations on their own line, possibly with a unique number to refer back to them later in the text. Currently all equations are in line, which makes the surrounding text hard to follow as it is broken up by massive equations.
  • Your plots for bifurcation diagrams C and D don't include all the curves that are seen in the original paper's plots. You should include an explanation for this in the figure description.
  • In general, you should provide more of a description for each of the included plots. It is not always clear what each plot is supposed to be demonstrating.

--John McGarry (talk) 08:58, 25 April 2017 (EDT)

Instructor Comments

  • Benchmark submitted on time?
    • Yes
  • Rubric submitted on time?
    • Yes
  • Results described and compared to original paper?
    • Yes, but too briefly.
  • Have you addressed the original biological hypothesis?
    • Yes, but too briefly.
  • Figures and legends to show results?
    • Yes
  • Discrepancies relative to original model?
    • Yes, but too briefly.
  • Uploaded Mathematica file?
    • Yes

On the whole, this is a good to very good first draft of the results section. Your descriptions of the results and their significance, and your figure captions, are much too brief. Some of the details of how you got the results should be explained. Furthermore, explaining how the results connect to the central hypothesis is very important, and by doing so, you will greatly strengthen this section. A strong extension will make this a truly excellent term paper. Keep up the good work!

--Hillel Chiel (talk) 20:47, 23 April 2017 (EDT)