User talk:Tes94/Benchmark I: Introduction
I am confused as to why you included your first paragraph, given the content of the second paragraph.
The format of your introduction is excellent; I like the sentence variety and level of detail.
The introduction is rough, but I believe you have made a fantastic start
The first paragraph seems like it could be condensed into one sentence to give context for the second, and the second paragraph could also be a little shorter. The second paragraph reads pretty choppily - the content is good but could use a little work to read smoothly. I wasn't able to find the original definition of the term PO in your paper (by scanning for (PO) in the text). The level of detail is sufficient and provides enough context. A second look would be good to focus and condense the beginning of the introduction.
- Benchmark submitted on time?
- Rubric submitted on time?
- Significance of problem?
- Statement of hypothesis?
- Yes, but the term peripheral oscillator is not defined
- List of references?
- Properly formatted references?
On the whole, this is a very good to excellent first draft. You need to provide the reader more background on the specific model you are developing, and relate it to other models and their assumptions; if you do this, this will be excellent.